Day4 : Audience - Academic Tone

Objectives: We will be able to ..........

1. understand what academic tone is 
2. identify differences between formal and informal languages
3. learn specific constructions to avoid in formal academic writing
4. recognize e-mails that do not sound academic
5. recognize e-mails that do sound academic
6. write academic e-mails

Consider your audience when writing emails or essays!

[5m] Warm-up and Discussion 

           Email Version 1.0 from a student   

[10m] Activity: Strip Email

You will be given strips of Emails. Your job is to put them into the right order.

[5m] Review and Discussion : How can we sound ‘ACADEMIC’?

[10m] Activity

Read the Audience and Purpose handout.

It has writing samples from the same student, Fatimeh Ghazi (Egypt), but with different audiences. Discuss the following questions. 

  1. Consider the following differences between the two: vocabulary, examples used, sentence structure, use of pronouns, specifics mentioned, organization, tone

  2. What did the writer include in the first example that she left out in the second? Why?

  3. What did she include in the second that she left out in the first? Why?

Go to the Google Docs "Identify the Differences" and complete your charts!

• https://docs.google.com/spreadsheet/ccc?key=0Av0Ji-sKFWRkdDVyMVJ4U25xSUpEVFlaVjlxdTg5d1E#gid=0

[5m] Sharing and Lecture : 

           Handout : Email Etiquette

           PPT : Academic Tone

Homework
DUE Jan, 24, Thursday 11:59PM 

1. Pretend that you do not know when the homework is due. 

Write me an e-mail to eunicenam84@gmail.com asking for extension of the due date.

Please use "academic tone" when you are writing e-mail.

Example Email: Email Version 2.0

   First, please create a folder named "Diagnostic Analysis" 
   under your ESL115 dropbox folder.
   Save all the files related to Diagnostic into that folder.

2. Read through the PPT : Academic Tone.
   Open your diagnostic and use "Save as" to create "diagnostic_revision_tone_YOURNAME.doc"

   Read your diagnostic essay again. Revise it so that your essay has ACADEMIC tone.

   If you make revisions, please highlight them like this!